Just a suggestion, coolest, you need to be less repetitive. I understand that there may actually be music between, but if you don't have actual music, it becomes overwhelmingly annoying. At the end I can understand 'cause you fadin' out. But through every line? No. I suggest you putting different words. As to what the song is trying to convey, It's the love song. Those are the easiest to write. It's hard to write about any thing else. So, for a love song, yeah, it's a'ight. Oh, and I like your pic. That really a pic of you ar is ti off the internet? It's ok if it isn't.
Oh, and by the way, there is one Twighlight Time lyric you ain't seen yet. I don't think. I'll keep you updated on the new ones that come up. A'ight? Talk to ya later.